Wish I Could

Submitted by Skybax on Mon, 08/25/2008 at 3:46pm.

A song I wrote. Leave a comment to let me know what you think, or what tune you think it should have (genre).

Wish I could tell you

How much I love you

Wish I could tell you

How I feel

Wish I could tell you

Why I’m here

Wish I could tell you

But I can’t my dear

 

There are so many things

I wish I could do

For you

But I can’t do even one

Until you let me in

 

Wish I could help you

In times of fear

Wish I could help you

Come over here

Wish I could help you

To help yourself

Wish I could help you

Don’t put me on the shelf

 

There are so many things

I wish I could do

For you

But I can’t do even one

Until you let me in

No I can’t do just one

Until you let me in

So let me in

» posted in Skybax's Blog
 

Comments:

by Melanerz - 14 days ago
Dorset England
Member Since: Aug 2008
Member Points: 192

There are some pretty good lines in there for a power ballad but the chorus doesn't fit it. It seems to be a song of two rhythms which don't work with lyrics. It works with things like piano pieces for example as you can play a triplet base part with a duplet melody line. I wrote a piano piece that uses this particular setup. Do you have msn? I can send it to you along with a waltz piece which I've just finished composing.

by jrs49 - 2 months ago
Steinbach Germany
Member Since: Mar 2008
Member Points: 431

I like it!Smile

 

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