Ode to Heidi

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Submitted by sally_cinnamon on Thu, 05/08/2008 at 5:01pm.

For Heidi.

I'll hold my arms above my head,

and be five foot four of pure strength.

I'm done.

With being curled up in a ball,

feeling useless, feeling so small.

This is it.

The test, the final trial,

an end to introspection and self denial.

I am me.

With all my faults and failings.

I will take charge of this ship I'm sailing..

and sail on.

Sail, on, sail on.

I'm sorry for every action,

that caused a chain reaction,

it all came back to me.

From now on,

I'll keep my thoughts and my words reined in,

keep my eyes sharp as I'm sailing,

and wear my heart upon my sleeve.

If you'll come back to me,

if you'll come back to me..

and sail home.

sail, home, sail home.

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Comments:

by sally_cinnamon - 18 months ago
England

Member Since: Mar 2008
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Thank you :-)

by Rael - 18 months ago
Calgary Canada

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Brilliant. I especially like the lines re: the chain reaction. I've been experiencing some karmic backlashes - it's neat how the metaphysic works. This song is sweet and spiritual, I hope to have a listen one day.

by sally_cinnamon - 18 months ago
England

Member Since: Mar 2008
Member Points: 299

No, I didn't mean to offend you, I honestly appreciated your comment :-))

by PVilla - 18 months ago
United States

Member Since: May 2008
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I think songs are just poems combined with music - just a thought.

When you write "critical" I hope you are using the word with the denotative meaning and not, what has become, the negative connotative meaning. The piece stands on its own with any and all interpretations, with reasonable inferences, credible. I meant no disrespect or injurious comment; I try to understand the author/poet/song writer's message based on the words - not the writer's experience. Sorry, I won't read "so deeply". Thank you again.

by sally_cinnamon - 18 months ago
England

Member Since: Mar 2008
Member Points: 299

In reply to Mr. Reilly- (see below oddly enough- spooky!)

Wow, thank you for reading so carefully :-).

The original line was

'An end to introspective self denial' perhaps I lost some of the meaning in changing the words?

Maybe I should have used a comma, instead of a full stop after

'I'm done' also.

If you want to be very crital, I am actually apologising throughout for being self-absorbed, whilst being self absorbed :-)

It is however, a song, written whilst feeling specific emotions. Perhaps the emotions do conflict, and the pleas I am making do not logically follow each other. It is an honest portrayal of how I was feeling at the time, so I don't mind.

by PVilla - 18 months ago
United States

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Member Points: 200

There seems to be a conflict between the lines:

"I'm done.

With being curled up in a ball, . . .

an end to introspection and self denial.

I am me."

vs.

"I'm sorry for every action,

that caused a chain reaction . . .

I'll keep my thoughts and my words reined in,"

I read the lines as the poet "changing once again" to comport to whomever the poet is writing. I apologize if I misread or misinterpreted the lines. Thank you for the imagery.

by mickeymannn - 18 months ago
United States

Member Since: Dec 2007
Member Points: 9

you go girl!

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